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Jasriella
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Dragons flying high
Oh the joy to be among
Caressing the wind
This is probably the first haiku I've made since grade-school. Is it ok?
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the dragon of eternity
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Location: in my room playing video games with unfinished homework by my side
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I'm still in grade school but here it goes anyway.
haikus are weird
and sometimes the don't make sense
refrigerator.
kidding
a voice
thousand words of love
sung by a beautiful voice
a bright new world sings
a voice with much hope
shining through a black shadow
a bright new world sings
a clear young voice calls
for the death of shadows
a bright new world comes
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And the day has arrived
To thresh the sky
And to thresh the sea
And the sea has embraced me
And it has dispensed me from my cage
Nothing can stop me now
....ummm. I think it works.. |
To thresh the sky is 4 and needs to be seven, so try putting an and at the beginning. maybe add a word or two to describe the sky. It is a great idea-
Please don't double post, and please use proper spelling, grammar and punctuation, it makes your posts so much easier to read. ~Namhias.
once again i post another haiku. 
The darkness grows strong
he runs into the black night
he loses his soul
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dfangd
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O'er swift rapids
Transcend crushing waves
Embrace the downpour
Yay for thirty second haikus XD
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QueenOfTheShadows
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| Posted: Thu 19 Feb 2009 19:30 Post subject: |
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Ok off the top of my head on these two
dream
Soul fire burning,
wishful churning quiet slide by
wish for tomorrow.
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autumn afternoon
Falling leaf burning,
orange, crimson now golden
Whispering rustle, now still
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yurrk I prefer free verse/ open.
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dfangd
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I agree, Queen... I actually am partial to sonnets.
Unfurl thy sheer wings
Plunge into oblivion
A heavenly sea
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QueenOfTheShadows
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been years since wrote in iambic-pentameter. should force my self to do structured pieces more often.
Haiku though is sometimes one of the trickiest, they can say so much yet so little in such a small space.... ah let's see if i can pull out another piece or two:
Languid wind, sweet song
Restless, roaming guiding me
endless under wing
Laughing waters wild
tumbling, conceited wish
flowing under claw
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Serenity
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Tiger lily sends her tears
from the crying sky up above
onto the dry ground.
Umm... it's not every good but it heck, I gave it a shot.
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DarkDragon
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Some things that came to me.
Young hearts burn cold above
Blazing winds sting their saddened eyes
Crying for tomorrow
Brave lonely soldiers
Betrayed by their home far away
Die in the blackness
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